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madame bellatrix

-okay people,i'm sure almost everyone here is at least familiar with  the fanfiction community.in light of that,there's always certain things about fanon that drive people up the wall,myself included.so any character portrayals or other 'tropes' you like,dislike or just notice,let's discuss.

 

-for example ,i notice a few things:

 

1)creepy fox.people seem to write fox as being a loser (bad with girls,no social life...it's probably true),or just plain old disturbed .(read a story when he kidnapped krystal from panther to win her love).wtf? (okay,i did it too,but still...)

 

2)wolf's mom was fat and/or had a bunch of kids...why do people think wolf's mom was fat/had a bunch of kids?

 

3)slippy gets no love :(

 

4)fox x wolf with no explanation?

 

5)krystal...just krystal

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OneUnder

The fact of the matter is that Star Fox, as a series, has some of the worst characterization that I've ever seen.  Pretty much anything is possible; occasionally you'll stumble across that one fanfiction that is better written than one of the games.  Of course, there is always the sea of oddities to sift through, and it appears you've only hit the tip of the iceberg.  :P

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The Shaper

I'm pretty certain the problems with Star Fox in fanfiction are the exact same as problems with any other character in fanfiction.

 

Overzealous fans decide to play a character out of context, they tell a story that makes no sense, they include moments that wouldn't normally happen in the direct source, and at the end the story they told wasn't satisfactory or enjoyable from any standpoint but their own. In no particular order.

 

While we're here though;

 

1. The interactions played by them acting towards OC's are usually ridiculous (Just met you on a planet in the middle of nowhere, wanna join Star Fox?) (P.S. Krystal doesn't count, because she was hot and Fox was horny after all those years).

 

2. Lack of attention to most Star Fox characters in comparison to others.

 

3. Characters being used as blank sheets of paper for whatever the author wants.

 

 

Most of what I am saying here kind of falls apart due to the lack of decent characterization in Star Fox (Hence what Crazyfooinc was talking about) and the fact that some of them really can be treated as #3 since they don't have any set ways they should act in a scenario. But occasionally there is a semblance of characterization that fanfiction fails to meet.

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madame bellatrix

- like to keep OC's as back ground extras,not taking over the story and all.

 

-also,when i started writing my main star fox fic,i did extensive research from the nintendo power comics to the 'farewell,beloved flaco' comics,starfox one,starfox 2, (brought fay,miyu and fara back),dusted off that old strafox 64 game,looked at assault,adventures and disregarded command...

 

-i took the whole project quite seriously,which i don't think a lot of writers do.

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Arashikage

What about when people write blatant self-insert fanfictions and steal Krystal away from Fox?  That actually really grinds my gears.  

 

However, Fox x Wolf can be explained sort of.  There are people down in the reaches of the Internet that like yaoi.  Now for those of you who don't know, yaoi is man love, which lots of people aren't into, but at the same time, lots of people are.  Without getting too much into detail, the people who like it and Star Fox decided to ship the two iconic male characters, whether that be Fox and Falco or Fox and Wolf, either one can be seen(Unfortunately for me, I've seen them both).  

 

As for Slippy hate, I personally find Slippy to be annoying, and a generally bad pilot.  He's a great mechanic, sure.  That's nearly undisputed.  But whenever I hear his voice, I want to slap babies.  

 

As for Wolf's mother, I haven't read any fanfiction with her in it, but wolves normally have litters, and said litters have an upwards of 5 or 6 puppies.  It'd make sense for her to have many kids, and at the same time, it would make as much sense for her to be heavy.  Wolves hunt, that's a fact, but when you anthropomorph them, they don't need to hunt anymore.  They have everything they need there like we do.  If the female wolf doesn't have to hunt, she sits around at home to watch over the house and kids.  Not as many calories being burned there.  

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Drasiana

1. A NEW THREAT ARISES... this phrasing specifically. Is used. Over. And over. sTOP

 

2. People creating teams of original characters and giving them stupid Star Fox ripoff names like GALAXY AARDVARK or whatever.

 

3. Anything with goddamn humans in it. Either "I am the last human of Earth because Andross destroyed it" or "Andross attacks Earth for no reason and Star Fox goes to defend it".

 

4. People have this really obnoxious tendency of making Fox into their kind of self-insert OC. I mean, it doesn't help that Fox's personality in the games is less than existent but it's just so painfully obvious that fanboys live vicariously through him and that's a pretty obvious explanation for the often downright-vitriolic defense of Fox/Krystal.

 

5. Grimdark. Holy fuck. This drives me up the wall perhaps more than anything else in fanfiction. What game did you play, here? You are a participant in the fandom of a video game that revolves around cartoon space animals cracking corny jokes while they shoot giant floating monkey brains. Adding EXTREME NUDITY AND INTENSE VIOLENT SEQUENCES contributes nothing. Look, you can include darker elements to the series, that isn't the issue. Hell, the games themselves did it. But there's this thing called tact, and the overcompensation graph goes off the chart when you feel the need to write about Krystal decapitating someone with her staff before getting raped by General Scales while Falco cries about contracting space AIDS after he becomes a prostitute to make ends meet for he and Katt's lovechild (but Panther is the real father!). This isn't fucking Requiem for a Dream or Saving Private Ryan. It's Star Fox. The name is goofy as shit. This is a series that has a frog with a mustache named Beltino in it, for God's sake. Just stop. When you write grimdark Star Fox fic the only thing that you're proving is that you have no idea how to cultivate the existing atmosphere that provided one of the only reasons that anyone even likes this series.

 

6. By a similar token, though less rage-inducing, Furry CNN fanfiction. People love making Star Fox over-political for some reason. I understand why given that warring militaries are a major aspect of the games but by the same token they're not the only aspect. Reading about a bunch of dudes with tails drone on about Generic Military Conspiracy X is really not as interesting as you think it is.

 

7. There is like a 98% chance that any OC is an insipid, uninspired cookie cutter piece of cheesecake. There have been like three Star Fox OC's in the history of forever that I've read about that didn't either instantly delete themselves from my memory or make me want to rip my own teeth out and mail them to the author with a note that reads "THIS IS WHAT YOU'VE DONE" written in my own blood. The worst of it is these authors think these characters are THE BEST THING. I don't know what makes you think your military wolfman boning Krystal and totally becoming a member of Star Fox and upstaging everyone else in the series is appealing to anything other than you and your hand of preference.

 

8. STOP BREAKING THE UNIVERSE. Your trenchcoat-wearing were-Jedi dragon with colour-changing eyes and Super Saiyan powers makes no fucking sense, I don't care that he can totally beat up like twelve Androsses at the same time. Did you know it's totally possible to create a cool character that operates within the perimeters of the series we've been given? Wow!

 

9. Slash is cool! Ship whatever characters you want! You know what isn't cool? Completely dismantling their personalities to make them "more like gay people". Don't be a dick.

 

10. Star Fox: THE NEXT GENERATION. For your regular dose of terrible with completely new characters that you have no reason to care about!

 

...

 

Suffice to say, I don't really try to read Star Fox fanfiction anymore.

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chaos_Leader

^ Thank you Dras. I couldn't have said it better myself if I tried, really. You hit most points I can think of that I agree completely

 

I wish I could be as articulate in my grievances as Dras and others have been. But I think this just about covers all the crap that makes star fox fanfic terrible. Hell, it was largely because of the very gripes mentioned above and that I had when looking at Star Fox fanfiction that sort of spurred me getting into writing. IE: "you know what? This is all crap. I can do better."

 

though I would be curious, on the other side of the equation: what elements has anyone seen/read that actually seem to work really well in Star Fox fanficton, (or any fanfiction for that matter)? I can understand "not doing the dumb stuff listed here", and I also can understand if there have been so few good or even "decent" Star Fox fanfiction that people have read that there's simply not enough of a sample pool to draw from.

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TCPeppyTc

I agree complety. Chaos_Leader have you written anything yet besides Starfox Legacy? and is SFL still a work in progress?

 

When people read fanfiction, they tend to want to know more about the characters they already know and love. A "new character" I find is acceptable ( even if from other dimension) as long as they relate to and help build the personas of the already existing characters.

 

I hate to say it, but SF fans may come from a smaller, more limited, less worldly pool than fans of say, Star wars, Harry Potter, or Game of Thrones.

 

Perhaps more than 1/2 of the fanbase are moody, angsty teens and preteens. They may project their own insecurities/ worries onto the Starfox team ( poor them! :( )

 

Also, the plot and characterization of the SF universe is paper thin, so may tempt people to say more ridiculous stuff. Idk though...

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Snys93

Wow guys,  now I don't even want to attempt continuing to writing my fanfic lol.

 

When I write I try making it original without using any canon characters, seeing that its sacrilegious to do so. I dislike crossovers, yiff-fics and the like, so I write my own characters and write a thesis on them before I am to put them in a predisposed fictional universe for them to inhabit and interact in.

 

I know its a cartoon, but whats the point in writing a fanfic about Starfox if you can't make it seem more real and tactile? I don't see them as animals but aliens with almost human characteristics that so happen to look like dogs or cats, foxes or apes. Or just highly evolved species' that we as humans could never imagine achieving our evolutionary status as sentient beings.

 

I might as well say it, maybe Starfox SHOULDN'T have been populated with birds, frogs, rabbits, monkeys and hound dogs and be just like any other scifi out there. I seems just such ridiculousness to think anyone would take this seriously. But YOU ALL do, thats why you're all members of this site. Thats why were all here.

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Drasiana

Wow guys,  now I don't even want to attempt continuing to writing my fanfic lol.

 

Just so you don't feel like this is a personal attack, I've never read your fanfic and know nothing about it. These are just tropes I've noticed and grown exceptionally sick of after spending a good 10~ years in the fandom with them.

 

I know its a cartoon, but whats the point in writing a fanfic about Starfox if you can't make it seem more real and tactile?

 

The point of writing a Star Fox fanfiction is to write a story about a series that you like and exploring aspects of it that interest you. The overall "point" of fanfiction is not and shouldn't be warping the existing universe to an unrecognizable point out of misplaced notions that superficially "realistic" elements instantly equate to quality.

 

I don't see them as animals but aliens with almost human characteristics that so happen to look like dogs or cats, foxes or apes. Or just highly evolved species' that we as humans could never imagine achieving our evolutionary status as sentient beings.

 

You can dress it up as nicely as you want, but half the cast is named after an animal. "Slippy Toad" is a real name being used here. They're animals. Anthropomorphic animals from space, sure, but it really isn't more sophisticated than that.

 

I might as well say it, maybe Starfox SHOULDN'T have been populated with birds, frogs, rabbits, monkeys and hound dogs and be just like any other scifi out there. I seems just such ridiculousness to think anyone would take this seriously. But YOU ALL do, thats why you're all members of this site. Thats why were all here.

 

I'm not entirely sure the point you're trying to make here. If Star Fox was about humans it would be like any other sci fi but who would take it seriously other than us which is why we are Star Fox fans? Huh?

 

The reason I have such an issue with the grimdarkery going on in the fandom is that it's for the most part, immaturity dressed up as maturity. People equate "darkness" with being "more adult" or "realistic" and this is an incredibly infantile and overly simplified view of the medium that isn't at all accurate to what we have to work with, nor does it give it any sort of justice at all. You can handle "mature" themes like death and rejection, loss of hope and guilt in Star Fox fanfic, don't get me wrong. But keep in mind I just rattled off a ton of themes that The Lion King handled. People want to make Star Fox into something it isn't instead of taking what it is and developing that, and I don't know why they do that, because we didn't fall in love with what Star Fox isn't.

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madame bellatrix

-i'd be lying if i didn't say i'm not guilty of some of the stuff.key example,the main story i'm working on may be disliked by a good number of people because it touched on some of said tropes example,dome cities on titania,sargasso as a city in space,samus ,BACKGROUND OC's.I do not believe in using oc's as a main character in fanfiction,ever,it's against my code.i use them as supporting characters to flesh out main characters,period.

 

Also,while i may be a slash/yaoi fan at times (other times it just makes me mad),as i grew up on the stuff,i don't like it unexplained.hell,wolf x leon makes more since in context than wolf x fox (seriously,the creepy lizard's been on his ass since the beginning and occasionally says weird shit...who's to say they aren't secret lovers,but I highly doubt it).Again,may seem like hypocrisy ,as i am writing fox x wolf as the main couple.it's just bending characters just to put them together without any explanation that irks me. here's how your average fic writer writes it one of them usually thinks 'oh,he's hot,but i'm scared to tell him...nevermind that we've been actively been shooting each other out of the sky and fighting for how long now? lets kiss nervously and jump in bed together!'

 

-instead,i'd write it as some twisted on and off love/hate,affair as the lives they've lead would always put  them at odds with one another.(except maybe post-aparoid )

 

-and last, the grim dark thing i agree that darker isn't better.i like to balance dark and light-hearted.i'm also a fan of inside jokes and occasional running gags,which i make use of .

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Arashikage

I'm almost inspired to write the worst fanfic in the world and break every single rule as an example.  I just have to be able to be tongue-in-cheek enough to make it noticeable, but barely.  

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madame bellatrix

I'm almost inspired to write the worst fanfic in the world and break every single rule as an example.  I just have to be able to be tongue-in-cheek enough to make it noticeable, but barely.  

-eh ,go for it.i'll be rootin' for ya :)

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Faisul

I think there are two general directions people seem to go when writing fanfiction. One is to elaborate on a setting they know well, by continuing or fleshing out an official story arc or to try to add depth to one aspect of the world or other. The most notorious pitfalls, Dras mentioned them - the stupid grimdark 're-imagining' of an established setting (See: Fallout Equestria for the most dire example I can think of), or atom smashing two unrelated settings together (like, Star Trek and Warhammer 40k, or Star Fox and Star Wars). Neither works unless it's for the sake of comedy or it's to prove some point or other, but most people writing these things simply do so to make some sort of weird doll house for themselves where they can cram their favorite characters together and make them smooch or something.

 

Another direction is character-focused, and this avenue seems to bring about the most problems. Dras also mentioned the big ones - the mary sue self-insert OC (do not steal) with amazing super powers that upstage the hero and is just so much better than anyone else and always gets the girl, or the warping of well-developed personalities in the official canon into waify, flamboyant queens. I have no problems with waify, flamboyant queens, mind you, but if the waify flamboyant queen was a rugged stoic or a deranged psychopath in the canon, having these personalities be erased in favor of the fic author's wank material is very annoying. These characters rarely have any depth, and the dialogue and general writing in such fics is the same quality as dime-book housewife porn - in my experience.

 

A story is only as good as its characters, and a setting only as good as the story it contains. Fanfic authors wanting to take an official canon in a new direction can do so to their heart's content, but they can also at least have the courtesy of making it interesting. The vast library of generic star fox slash porn out there is perhaps the most boring thing I can imagine, with characters twisted out of recognition and fitted into stock porn roles just to gratify the boring author and the boring people who enjoy this kind of thing. It's their right to do whatever they want with the words they put together but I reserve the right to say it's fucking boring.

 

An example of a good fan production where the atmosphere and tone of Star Fox has been successfully changed is Fredryk Phox's Star Fox cartoon, where the characters retain their base personalities but not without having them tweaked in subtle (or not so subtle) ways, casting the tone of the setting into a very different but interesting direction. He is able to pull it off because he understands how characterization works, and doesn't just fill the character gallery with stock character types to then throw them into a random chain of events that gets them to bone or wallow in melodrama over not getting to bone. Boning is not the most important thing in the world, guys! It's actually pretty boring when it's some passion-less, by-the-numbers wank fantasy involving favorite characters getting jiggy just to titillate boring people! Also, I know triangle relationships are drama but it's a really boring kind of drama unless one of the jilted parties is like, I don't know, a sentient color or something.

 

The really great fanfiction keeps the fundamentals of a setting or the characters of a franchise in mind while also adding to it - shifting tone or atmosphere into new directions, or adding history and background to events portrayed in official canon, without having the whole thing spiral into a boring stereotype or boring porn. That kind of thing is so artless as to be non-existing, just another number in a mind-numbingly dull catalog of almost exactly identical crap that seems to just go on and on and on and on.

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madame bellatrix

-yes,definately agree on crossover thing,sometimes,you gotta leave it alone...however,i think starfox can cross over pretty damn well with mass effect ,anyone agree with this?

 

-also ,the oc thing drives me up the wall,and all the bad porn.... :(

 

-and you know what,faisul? you named it right,it's the lack of atmosphere,and character depth,etc .i think it's more people projecting their fantasies into it than anything and not trying to 'tell a story'. fredryk phox is telling a story and that's it.he's got the characterization,atmosphere,the world and everything set up ,people's backstories and all too (i can't wait for it to be finished :D ) .i think a good number of people in the fanfic-circuit are just shippers too :( .i've read fics where the plot is the selected couple hooking up and bangin' each other ... i much prefer there to be some kinda background plot going on.

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Jcopper24

So glad that I read this tread. I've started writing my own fanfiction based on the Cornerian army and its members. I'm limiting the number of my own O.C.s to 3 while accepting others provided I can find a space for them. I include characters like Bill Grey, Fara Phoenix (who admittedly starts a relationship with an O.C. but it builds HIS character), Fay Spaniel, and Miyu Lynx because they get so little screen time if any. I use real names for enemies and locations with as few original creations as possible. If anyone is interested it can be found at the following link

 

http://jcopper24.deviantart.com/art/Lylat-Wars-Sector-Y-Chapter-1-378497985

 

It follows story arcs that take place in different locations and time periods during 64 and Assault. Also checkout the topic "Cornerian Army Fanfiction" for more. Feedback and questions welcome. Thanks and I hope I can do Star Fox justice.

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Drasiana

Fara Phoenix (who admittedly starts a relationship with an O.C. but it builds HIS character)

 

I don't know if this just came across weirdly but I'll comment on it as a general note for ALL writing:

 

Please don't use female characters purely as an item to progress the character arc of a man. Women aren't plot devices and writers need to stop using them as nothing but catalysts.

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TCPeppyTc

Agreed Dras. In this day and age, with all the advancements women have made, youd think everyone would have figured out how to make interesting female characters!

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Drasiana

You'd think but I still get a weirdly huge number of male writers asking me "how to write women" and I'm like you literally just write a dude and then change the name and pronouns after the fact I will not be offended if you write my gender as if we are people whoa

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TCPeppyTc

Hmmmmmm.... can I ask you how to write women if I ever need help?  :troll:

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Jcopper24

The intention was to build them both due to the lack of official info on Fara. I intend to give her her own chapters where she is productive and capable. I admit, most fanfictions do use females for male advancement. I'm trying to break that pattern by reading these "Do Not" posts. I am new to writing so bare with me while I improve.

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Snys93

Female characters in charge has always been awesome. Never liked how there are only male generals and commanders.

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Jcopper24

Hence why Fay is the head of Maintenance, and Miyu is the head combat instructor. Add in Fara as a captain and everyone has equal opportunity more or less in my fan fic. 

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Xortberg

Dras tell me

 

How I rite wimminz

 

Pls

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Drasiana

First you must harvest a tampon from an elderly lesbian matriarch. Use the tampon to paint the sign of the Triple Goddess on the floor of a burned wedding chapel while naked and anointed with rosemary and lipstick. Chant the incantation of the prophet Carrie Bradshaw and set fire to a garter. This will summon Her, and only She can give you what you need to unlock the secrets of The Women for writing purposes. Godspeed.

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Shes seen the Lylat War and rallied to Corneria's defense in the bleakest of times. But somehow, you look as if you miss it."      "I've had enough share of war as have you. But I'm not gonna parade around saying I made a difference when I truly didn't. I'm not trying to forget. Still it was nice when we had something to do."      "Well, we'll get our chance soon enough. Eight months isn't too long from now."      "Yeah. You gonna eat this?"      "Not any more and I'll thank the day Chef gets better."          Engineering...      Despite being an old ship, Madeline still had ways of ensuring her crew with means to occupy their time. No one onboard is more intune with the supercarrier than the Katinian coyote Engineer Chief Martin Poscon. Almost a hobby, Martin clearly enjoys being around the Lady Mad's thruster assembly and anywhere else that needs tightening or recalibrating. Today was more of the same for the Chief as well. He walked down a catwalk assessing new reports on the ships interior workings with crewmen Vergiff Kasteele.       "An EPS bypass bus burns out and no one tells me?"      "Sorry Chief , we were locking down a leak in the plasma conductors when we got this."      "Secondary systems?"      "They activated just as they were supposed to."      "Might be feedback from the sub-relay."      "Sir, half these units need to be replaced. Patch jobs just won't do it. The Lady Mad hasn't been the same since the Aparoids invaded."      "When the ol' girl gets decommissioned she won't need most of them anyway. They're mainly are just for weapons. Don't worry about it."      The PA sounded.      "Chief Poscon, report to deck 12 section B."      "Ah, must be the support frames again. Vergiff, go check the bus and make sure its offline this time."            Corneria, Durin province, interstate highway...      "I'm confused, run that by me again."      A few members of President Andsa's cabinet were seated in a limousine discussing current topics presently on the minds of voters, while on-route to the President's address to the senate.      "Okay, are you paying attention this time? 300 hundred years ago, the government at that time disbanded much of the organized military in favor of a simple set up where General staff controlled the fleet and army simultaneously. Got that?      "Yeah, but how is that simple? Wouldn't it be better to have the Admiralty continue to be in control of the star navy?"      Another member butted in. "Because to them it seemed like lasting peace was around the corner, which when you study history a little further..."      "Yeah, yeah, little regional conflicts here and there, I know. That still doesn't answer my question: Why are we now reverting back to the old standard? General Pepper showed that the system worked."      "Thats different, General Pepper was a noble and wise leader in a time of chaos. Now that governmental ruling parties have reformed there is just no need for this type of system and restoring full control to the Admiralty seems like the next necessary step. That would be too much power for one person."      "Hey wheres Norin?"      "Hes got the flu, he can't make it to see the President's speech."      Norin Rabbik the Secretary of Agriculture, born in Delphine a seaside town off the Aquantica coast. Had a dream of making it big in politics one day but never thought he'd land a spot in the Pearl Manor in the President's cabinet. Even though Corneria is a green world, no seems keenly interested in agriculture which doesn't help Norin and his obscurity. Still he does his job well despite often times being overlooked by his contemporaries.              CDF Station codename Onyx, Near Katina...      Onyx Station, a hub of activity, a city in space. Here vessels exhausted from exploration or routine patrols come to refuel, as freighters and liners from all of Lylat either dock to offload supplies or continue on their route while protected from pirates. But here reside the true guardians of Lylat, the ones who keep it safe from threat of invasion.      "And, all reds! Haha!!"      "Dammit Kaylee, I do not want to play cards with you ever again if continue this winning streak."      In the pilot's lounge, the CAG and his wings relaxed playing poker and swapping tales.      "Wanna play a hand, Captain?"      "With Kaylee's luck, Dirk I don't have a chance."      Lt. Dirk Kelso, second in command of Banshee Squadron extended a glass to his CO and best friend Capt. Saul Govorian. "Come on at least drink with us. Just a little." he said pinching his fingers.      "Well it is Saluting Day after all, the Twentieth anniversary of the end of the Lylat War. Why not."      "Yeah!!! Come on, cap!!!" Yells Kaylee.                  Somewhere in space...      "Now that we are in full agreement, we can finally move forward."      "Jalkin you know I would do anything for you, take a bullet even, but this is too much me."      "I can't trust anyone else Geortin. Its you, its got to be. Please my brother there is no one else. If I could change places with you I would. But my place is here."      Jalkin hands Geortin a briefcase. "I-I understand." said Geortin who than left towards an airlock where a shuttle was waiting, which left as soon as he boarded. Jalkin then toggle a comlink.      "Taskforce one, is everything ready?" A reply came swiftly.      "Yes sir, we are on route as we speak."       "Proceed as planned, package is being delivered."       "understood, standing by. "
    • Zaphyr Stone
      By Zaphyr Stone
      So this is a fic about my character, Jack. While it is an OC fic, there are cameos from canon characters, so there's that. I just really wanted to tell this story. Thanks for reading, and don't forget to comment and give your opinion of the story thus far! I value any and all constructive criticism.
      Story Description: On the eve of his championship fight, Jack Darcy reflects on the wild journey that led him to the boxing ring. Tracing his steps from soldier to war hero to discharged veteran and remembering friends made and lost along the way, he is now faced with a simple question he cannot answer: What's next?
      This is an M rated fic due to swearing and violence.
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      Those moments right before a match are always the most nerve wracking. The silence of the locker room is filled with a flurry of thoughts lingering in the air around me. I feel my self-doubt rise to slow my stride, so I fill the void by focusing on preparation.  
      I stretch everything. I move around. I throw punches, anything and everything to warm up and stay warmed up. Gerard helps to rub me down. I still try to crack a joke now and then about how he should take me out to dinner first. Sure, it’s immature and a painfully old joke, but we still laugh. It makes a grown man rubbing Vaseline into my chest and shoulders less awkward for me as well. We keep things loose and casual. Dramatic pep talks are for movies, and they just psyche me out.
      My manager, Johnny, walks in to check up on me and wish me luck. The stocky blue nose pit bull looks like he should be the one getting into the ring, and I should be in the pressed suit wishing him a good fight. He reminds me this fight is being recorded live and to just focus on my job. It’s not my first time in front of a camera, but I’ve never been recorded while doing my job. I try not to think about it as Gerard re-centers my focus. The gray-spotted rat weaves with me in a bout of shadowboxing, helping me to stay in the zone. Before I know it, the referee is coming in and giving us the standard “rules of the game” spiel, and Gerard is taping and gloving my hands. It’s time to go.
      I pull off my sweats, relieved that the uncomfortable heat is alleviated, don the silken violet and gold robe that bears my family name, Darcy, pull the hood so it drapes over my blunt white snout and walk out with Gerard. The din of the crowd erupts into wild cheering as the announcer cries out for Jack Darcy. I hear only the beat of my own heart reverberating in my ears as I make the walk out to the ring. My fans cheer my name over the musical fanfare that precedes me. As I make my way through with Gerard, it still amazes me how far I’ve come. I feel like I’m marching out to the warzone again, off to fight off the Venomians or the Aparoids. I feel the casing of my prosthetic press against my knee as I walk up the steps and duck through the ropes. It’s almost time.
       
      The arena darkens, and a video montage displays on the monitors, glorifying my opponent. I only vaguely hear the excited speech. My mind, despite the focus I fought to maintain, wanders back to the interview Cornerian Sports Network conducted with me to show with this fight. I still remember how strange it was to be behind a camera and questioned about topics that weren’t military-related. The reporter was patient and kind and asked mainly about my readiness for a fight of this magnitude, but there’s one question that sticks out in my mind, one I was unable to truly answer.
      “What’s next for Jack Darcy?” she had asked, feline whiskers twitching as she looked up from her notes.
      I had been frozen to my seat, mildly caught off guard. What was next for me? What did I want? My life felt like it had been one crazy event after another, and I was just along for the ride. I remember answering something along the lines of doing whatever would make me happiest. It was purposefully vague but still the truth, even if I had no idea after all these years what would make me happy.
      I close my eyes, silencing the world around me for just one brief heartbeat in time, and, in that moment, I can almost hear the roar of the jet thrusters and feel the rushing wind of the landing aircraft that brought me to the first step of my journey to this stage.
       
       
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      It was the first time I had ever seen anything so beautifully intricate and simplistic at the same time. My father, forever the mechanic, would go on for what seemed like hours about the elegant sturdiness of the Arwing, and he would explain the intricacies of its inner workings with such passion and excitement that I just didn’t have the heart to stop him despite my ten year-old brain’s inability to comprehend his technical ravings. When Katina’s annual air show rolled around, his normal excitement was only exaggerated.
      “Darcy men have always had a hand in the technological advancement of Lylat, Jack. We have a proud heritage in mechanical achievement.” He had told me as we took the public transport out to Katina Outpost.
      I had to have heard that line at least once a day from him, that goofy grin on his blunt red muzzle. I learned from my mother that this claim was fairly exaggerated but harmlessly so. My father genuinely loved his work and was proud to be a part of whatever project he was assigned to, so there was no reason to bring him back down to ground level and remind him that our family’s role in Lylat’s “technological advancement” was more of a fingerprint than a hand. I never gave mechanics much thought. It felt like a foreign language to me.
      It wasn’t until I saw the shining silhouette against the skyline that I caught a glimpse of my father’s excitement. It shot through the sky with such intense speed and managed to do it so effortlessly.
      “That's like the one James McCloud flew, right?” I asked as we climbed out at our stop, my mother keeping a firm hold on my shirt collar so as not to lose me in the crowd.
      “Yeah, it’s very similar.” He nodded with a serene smile, “It’s a newer version, a little more advanced. It’s one of Corneria’s top tier models.”
      “Cool,” my eyes lit up as I remembered once seeing the legendary pilot fly his Arwing on TV.
      “Let’s see if we can catch the last of its practice run.” My mom goaded me along with a smile. She didn’t need to tell me twice.
      My dad led the way through the crowd with me following at his heels. It was always easy to find him, thanks to the red of his fur and the stocky build of his bull terrier body. I took after my mother’s white and black coat, and between the three of us, it was hard to lose each other in a crowd. We came to the main runway of the airshow, and it was glorious.
      Aircraft in all shapes and sizes, from single-pilot fighters to massive air carriers, lined either side of the runway, and groups moved from one to another down the line. Booths were stationed at each craft, some informational, some from organizations associated with the outpost, and others recruitment for the Cornerian Defense Force.
      I watched the Arwing from before zip over the airfield and towards the outpost, bystanders cheering excitedly.
      “He’s going back to the hangar, and they’ll wheel the Arwing out to the show on the ground.” My dad explained.
      “We have some time, why don’t we have a look around?” My mom suggested, and she sauntered out with my dad, the hem of her pink sundress fluttering in the breeze.
      I followed behind, scittering around each craft we came across. Some of the booths had games, and others giveaway prizes. The CDF recruiters were holding various physical contests; several older teens tried their hand at the pull-up bar. One daring adult husky was strapped into a gyroscopic training wheel while watching a simulation through a VR headset. I saw a pair of my friends ooing and awing over the large carrier. All huddled together at the open docking ramp, they tried to sneak peeks inside the cargo bay. As soon as I came over to see them, we immediately fell into excited chatter.
      “The guy is giving tours of the inside.” My friend Max bounced excitedly on his feet, which made his floppy yellow ears bounce as well, “We’re waiting our turn to go in.”
      “Yeah, and we got the new kid to think there’s killer robots inside.” Hank, a blue heeler, snickered, “We told him the carrier was shipping defective robots and that it was running late and had to stop for the airshow with the robots still in the cargo bay.”
      “And…why are we telling him this?” I raised a brow in confusion.
      “Because he just went in for a tour, and when he comes out, we’re gonna record him screaming like a girl.” Max grinned.
      “It’s gonna be awesome.” Hank laughed, pulling out a miniature tablet from the pocket in his hoodie and unlocking it.
      “There’s no way he actually believes that. That’s the dumbest thing I’ve heard you guys come up with.” I rolled my eyes. They were normally good guys, but every now and then they would get a hold of a stupid idea.
      “Oh wait wait! Here he comes!” Max shushed me and ushered me aside while Hank set the camera on his tablet to record as a small group of people walked out with a Cornerian aircraft technician.
      The new kid they were talking about was trailing timidly at the back of the group. Grady Newell was a scrawny strange little cat gecko with deep reddish-brown scales, a thick curly tail and glittering silver eyes. He was in the same grade as us, but his size always made everyone think he was younger. He was afraid of everything and didn’t really talk to anyone, so no one knew much about him. This made him a pretty decent target for some of the bigger kids in the class. Max and Hank were just falling into the new fad as always.
      I watched as Max kept out of sight and sneaked around behind Grady on the ramp.
      “Hey Grady! How was it?” Hank called out, waving to the gecko.
      Grady waved with a shy smile, walking over to Hank, “It was really cool! But I didn’t see any of the—”
      Max jabbed his fingers into Grady’s sides with a loud “BZZZZT!”
      Sure enough, the color drained from Grady’s scales, and out came a shrill screech that nearly split my eardrums. Hank and Max howled in laughter as some of the nearby adults looked over at us in confusion. I felt my face and ears heat up in embarrassment. Grady had the good sense to run away from the attention he had caused.
      “Oh my god, I can’t breathe!” Max doubled over in laughter.
      “You guys, I think he peed himself.” Hank could barely get the words out.
      “Well I hope it was as awesome as you guys hoped.” I frowned uncertainly, “Can we go now? People are looking at us.”
      The rest of the afternoon, I was able to forget about my friends’ shenanigans with Grady. We roamed the airshow like we owned the place, checking out the fighters and touring the carriers. We even got to check out a flight simulation. As things began to die down, there was one last event, the one I had been waiting for. I said goodbye to Max and Hank and reunited with my parents to find a good spot for the Arwing flight demonstration. As everyone began to gather together, I noticed a familiar silhouette huddled under the wing of a small fighter, thick tail curled around him.
      Guilt churned in my stomach. Grady was always by himself, and the times he wasn’t weren’t much better. I knew I should have stopped Max and Hank from pranking him. Whether it was because I felt bad for him or for not stepping in, I wasn’t sure, but before I knew it, I was just a few steps away from him. He really did look pitiful.
      “Hey Grady?” I tried.
      The little gecko jumped slightly and looked over at me warily. I wasn’t sure how you could tell if a lizard had been crying, but I could tell somehow.
      “Listen,” I rubbed the back of my neck awkwardly, “I’m sorry about earlier. Max and Hank are idiots, but they’re not bad guys.”
      “Oh,” Grady sniffed, “It’s okay, I guess. It’s my fault for being so scared all the time.”
      “You have to admit it was a pretty lame lie. Killer robots? Really?” I couldn’t help but laugh.
      Grady cracked a smile too. “Yeah, I didn’t believe them at first. They seemed so sure, though, so I thought maybe it was true.”
      “Rule number one with Max and Hank: if they have to convince you of something, they’re probably trying to fool you.” I laughed, “So…are you by yourself out here?”
      Grady nodded, a somewhat proud gleam in his eyes, “Yep! My mom works evening shifts, but I have a tram pass so I can get home from school.” He reached into his pocket and pulled out a card with his picture and name stamped on it, “So I used it to come to the airshow. I wanted to see the new Arwing.”
      “Woah, that’s really cool!” My eyes widened impressed. I didn’t have a tram pass, “Well the Arwing is getting ready to take off. If we hurry, we can find a good spot to watch.”
      “Really?” Grady’s silver eyes sparkled hopefully.
      We took off back towards the crowd, squeezing our way through to find any kind of gap where we could see. Being a couple of the shortest kids in our class, we understood the struggle. Finally, we were able to find a small spot at the front, just big enough for us to share. We watched the pilot board the Arwing from a hovering monitor, the actual fighter being some distance away for safety. The slate gray peregrine falcon just oozed coolness.
      With a loud boom, the Arwing took off, and we watched it take sharp turn after turn, somersault in graceful loops. I heard Grady gasp in awe next to me at the swirling flash of light it created from its barrel roll. The two of us had never been happier.
      My parents offered to give Grady a ride home, and the entire way there, we chatted up a storm. Grady was actually a pretty cool guy. He was just as much a fan of James McCloud as I was, maybe even more, and he wanted to be a pilot when he grew up. We both collected and built model Arwings, liked a lot of the same TV shows, it couldn’t have been more perfect. We had no idea just how different our lives were going to be now that we had a friend in each other.
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      Author's Note: And that concludes chapter 1! Keep an eye out for chapter 2, and thanks for reading. Shout-out to Tiger, Doc, Armin and Kurt for helping me name a couple of these characters!