Starfox: Rise from the Ashes

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  1. 1. *READ FIRST* When the forum last updated, all the quotation marks turned to squares. This makes the story really hard to read so i reposted it square free on page three.Well i love feedback so watcha think on a scale to 1-5.

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THIS IS AMAZING :D I really do love it. I haven't read all of it, but so for, yeah, this a--a--a I don't know, it's amazing, KEEP IT UP :D I'll read the rest of it later. :wink:

EDIT: I read the rest of it now, and again, it's really good. :D

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THIS IS AMAZING :D I really do love it. I haven't read all of it, but so for, yeah, this a--a--a I don't know, it's amazing, KEEP IT UP :D I'll read the rest of it later. :wink:

EDIT: I read the rest of it now, and again, it's really good. :D

Thank man! It means a lot when someone enjoys you work.

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This is really nice, i really love how you tied all of the characters together

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“How long are you out of commission?”

“Forever if he keeps this up,” Peppy said tying off Fox’s bandages. Fox sighed.

“Well anyways, I hope ya find her Falco,” Bill said. “Best of luck to ya, and get better soon Fox. We can’t have one of the best pilots in the galaxy hangin up his wings just yet, too much crazy out there.”

“Thanks Bill, keep ‘em in line down there.” Fox said.

“Yeah, and don’t do your job too well. It’d be just your luck you’d get stuck with it.” Falco said.

“Tell me about it.” Bill said. Then he waved and the screen went black.

“Falco, go ahead and tell rob to plot a course for Sector X. Tell him to stop a safe distance away and slide in the rest of the way quiet. When we get in system try and contact the research facility on a secure short range channel. No need to attract any unwanted attention.” Fox said.

“Gotcha,” Falco said and left for the bridge. Wolf walked over to Fox and offered his hand. Fox took it and Wolf pulled him to is feet.

“Thanks,” Fox said. He felt a hand on his shoulder and he turned around. As he did Krystal slid her arms around him and he returned the gesture.

“I'm so sorry.” Fox said stroking Krystal’s hair. They embraced for a little longer, then separated. Fox brushed her hair away from her face and reviled the gash over her eye.

“That’s gonna get infected.” He said.

“It’s nothing.” Krystal said.

“It needs to be cleaned.”


“Come on, let’s go to the med bay.”

“We’ll meet you two later on the bridge.” James said.

“Sounds good.” Fox replied. As the others filed out Fox stopped Slippy. “I got a little project for ya.”

“Cool,” Slippy said, “I love a good project.”

“I know you do.” Fox said with a laugh. “So here’s the deal. Dad’s probably gonna be flyin for me until I get back on my feet so I want you to make him a HUD in his sunglasses.”

“Sounds like fun, and it shouldn’t take me too long.”

“Do you need a pair to start on?”

“Nah, I’ll start from scratch.”

“Awesome, thanks buddy.”

“No problem Fox.” And Slippy ran off to his lab. Fox laughed.

“Come on,” Fox said to Krystal. “Let’s get you cleaned up.”

In the med bay Krystal sat on the edge of a table while Fox gathered the things he needed.

“Go ahead and pull your hair back,” he told her.  She did as Fox walked over to the table and sat down what he had gathered.

“Alright,” He said, dampening a cloth with rubbing alcohol, “this is gonna sting.” Fox pressed the cloth against the wound. Krystal yelled and pulled away.

“Sorry,” she said, “that hurt more than I thought it would.” She leaned back forward and gripped the edge of the table. Fox pressed the cloth back on her forehead and she went ridged. He wiped the wound two or three times and it started to bleed.

“Dang.” He muttered, and reached for a clean cloth. “Here, hold this on it to stop the bleeding.” Krystal released her death grip on the table and took the cloth. “That’s gonna need stitches.” Fox said. He headed to another cabinet and rummaged for a bit before pulling a suture kit out and walking back to Krystal.

“You’re not gonna do it are you?” Krystal asked.

“Yeah, why?” He said grabbing a pair of rubber gloves and pulling them off.

“Do you know how?”

“Of course, they taught it to us at the academy. And don’t worry, it won’t hurt as much as the alcohol.”

“I hope not.” She said and Fox smiled.

“Here lay back.” Fox told her. He tied a knot in the end of the stitch thread and stepped around the side of the table.

“You ready?” He asked.

“I guess.”

“Ok, move the cloth slowly, we don’t need it bleeding on us.” She moved the cloth. Thankfully the bleeding had stopped.

“Take a deep breath.” Fox said and leaned over her. She inhaled and he pushed the curved needle through the skin. Krystal whimpered but didn’t flinch. Fox slid the needle under the gash and pulled it out the other side. He pulled until the knot caught and pulled the two sides of the gash flush making sure not to over-lap them.

“You ok?” He asked.


“Ok, I'm gonna finish up.” Fox told her. She took another breath and Fox pushed the needle in next to where he had pulled it out and pulled it under the gash and out the other side. He repeated this three more times making sure that each stitch was pulled tight. When he finished he tied off the end and cut the extra off.

“There, all done,” Fox said. “That wasn’t so bad now was it?”

“I guess,” she replies running her finger over the now closed cut. “Where are the stitches?”

“Underneath.” He told her. “Its cleaner, looks better. And there less likely to catch on anything.”

Fox cleaned up and then pulled the gloves off.

“Wanna head back to the bridge?” He asked?

“Sure,” Krystal answered getting off the table and letting her hair back down.

Back on the bridge James, Wolf, Tomas, and Peppy were talking and laughing. Sarah met Fox and Krystal at the door. She commented of Fox’s work and he thanked her. Falco called Fox over. Fox left Krystal with her mom.

“Are we there yet,” Fox asked. Falco laughed.

“We won’t be in system until late tomorrow,” he replied.

“Don’t worry, she’s not going anywhere.”

“Yeah, I know. I'm just ready to get to her.”

“Trust me, I know how you feel.” Fox said and yawned.

“Go get some rest man.” Falco told him. Fox nodded and walked over to James.

“I'm turning in, Peppy, can you take care of showing everyone their quarters?”

“No problem.” Peppy said.

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Looking good. I really like this story. Better then anything I've done. :?

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hers the last of Chapter 5

“Thanks,” Fox replied and walked back over to Krystal and Sarah, “I'm turning in. Sarah, Peppy’s gonna set you and Tom up but if your plan on turning in sooner than the guys I can show you your room.”

“No, that’s fine,” Sarah said , “Krystal and I are gonna catch up.”

“Alright. Krystal, keep an eye on Falco for me. He’s got a lot on his mind. I don’t want him to lock down again.”

“Hopefully being with Katt again will help.” Krystal said.

“Yea, that’s what I'm hoping.” Fox said. “Well, ‘night yall.”

“Good night Fox.” Krystal said.

Fox left the bridge and headed for the elevator. He leaned on the wall as it took him to his floor and his exhaustion hit him all at once. He dosed for a moment and was jolted awake by the elevator stopping. He stumbled off the elevator yawning and headed to his room. He pulled off his shirt as the door shut behind him. He stepped in the bathroom, turned on the sink, and let the water warm up as he changed into his sleep shorts. He pulled a washcloth off the rack, soaked it in the now warm water. He wiped his face down and turned off the water, leaving the washcloth by the sink. He sat on the bed, threw his feet under the covers, and was asleep before his head hit the pillow.

Chapter 6, Pick Up the Pieces, is in the works

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Caught up, and always happy to see more. Even if it is a really small chapter. =] It gets me inspired to write mine. So thank you, and don't stop it now. =]

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Caught up, and always happy to see more. Even if it is a really small chapter. =] It gets me inspired to write mine. So thank you, and don't stop it now. =]

=same. Keep it up! I'm always happy to see more. :)

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Heres the little bit I've got. Im gonna try a new method of trying to get a little bit done each day hand ave somthing to show for it. My problem right now is i know where im going but i gotta get there without forcing it. Anyways enough talk heares the first bit of chapter 6

Chapter 6: The Face-less Enemy

Fox woke up the next morning around nine o’clock Corneria time. He stretched and flinched when his back caught. He was amazed at how energized he felt. He stood up and pulled on a shirt, then headed for the mess hall. When he got there he started looking for the coffee under the counter.

“You’re up early.” A voice across the room said. Fox jumped and slammed the back of his head on the bottom of the counter.

“Dude! Are you ok?” Falco said rushing over and helping Fox up.

“Yeah,” Fox said. “Don’t do that!”

“Sit down, I’ll start the coffee.”

“Thanks.” Fox pulled out a chair at the table and sat as Falco pulled the coffee tin from the cabinet over the sink.

“So, did you get any sleep?” Fox asked.

“Yeah, a little. Dunno how.”

“What’s got you so nervous?”

“This is Katt we’re talking about. God only knows how she’ll react.”

“You’re gonna drive yourself crazy. We should be within secure channel range in a few hours.”

“Yeah, your right, I gotta get my mind off it.” Falco started the coffee maker as Wolf stepped in the door.

“I figured I’d be the only one up.” He said.  Fox grunted and turned his back to Wolf.

“Something I said?” Wolf asked.

“Old feelings die hard.” Falco said.

“You want me to leave?”

“Nah, pull up a chair,” Fox said.

“You sure?”

“Yea, I want to sort some stuff out.” Wolf and Falco both sat down at the table.

“Just tell me what you wanna know.” Wolf said.

“How did you manage to get inside of Andross’ ranks?” Fox asked. Wolf sat back and sighed.

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The beginning of another good chapter.  :)

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Heres the little bit i got done today. Im still workin on getting the story where i want it. Like i said, i know where i want to take it next but i dont want to force it. Also i want to thank every one for their support. I remember when i first started this in class one of my best friends tought I'd lost my mind. He's since changed his mind (at least about the story, he still thinks i'm nuts... and so do i so i cant fault him for it). and all the feedback ive got here has been positive and constructive from the start (Kursed, Julius, Braux, Harmony, lost in thought, i havent forgot yall) not to mention the recent spurring from Nick and Wolf Fang. Thanks for everythine people  :wink:

ok enough rambling, heres the next meger amount.

“Well, as you know me and James went into the service at the same time. After a while it turned into a routine, and I wanted more so I started runnin’ bounties. Now don’t take that the wrong way, I didn’t just roll any head they threw my way, I picked and chose my marks. After awhile, I made a name for myself.”

“So what,” Falco said, “you just walked away from the military?”

“No,” Wolf said, “all the bounties were on the side.”

“I thought you said you didn’t start the bounty tabs until after Andross.”

“I didn’t. Back then the bounties weren’t important enough to track. The only heads I ever watched were yours.”

“Which brings me to my next question,” Fox said.

“Shoot.” Wolf said. Fox shifted in his seat.

“Who called the hit on my team?” Fox asked.

“I wish I knew.” Wolf answered. Fox sighed and stood. He walked over to the counter and started to fix himself a cup of coffee.

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I like that in this story Wolf is the good guy.....But he's still cool. Unless you decide that he'll go back into being a bad guy. Anyway, :yes: keep up the good work man!

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“You want a cup?” Fox asked turning around and leaning back on the counter.

“I'm good,” Wolf replied. “You went planning on hunting this guy down were you? I mean, the key to any formation is team work. It’s not some huge secret.”

“That’s not the part that bothers me.” Fox said. He took a sip of his coffee, put it on the counter, and started pacing. “I can’t help but feel like whoever called this hit has ME figured out.”

“How do you figure?”

“What if whoever it was knew I’d freak out? What if they were just trying to split the team?”

“Sounds a little paranoid if you ask me.” Falco said.

“It makes since though.”

“My turn to ask a question,” Wolf said.

“Go ahead.” Fox replied.

“Why is it that you got so mad when I went to Andross?” Wolf asked.  Fox stopped pacing and leaned back on the counter.  He took another sip of coffee and then leaned back on the counter.

“You said it yourself,” Fox said, “you and dad were close.  Why wouldn’t I get pissed off when you ran off and joined the people responsible for his disappearance, especially after you delivered the news to me and mom?” Fox closed his eyes and fell into an old memory from six years ago.

It was dark outside but not really late when a younger Fox answered a knock at the door.

“Oh, hey Wolf.” He said, “Are you guys back already?”

“Hey Fox,” Wolf answered, “Is your mom home?”

“Yeah, come on in.” Fox lead Wolf to the living room where Anna was watching the evening news. “Hey mom, Wolf’s here.” Anna stood.

“Hey Wolf.” She welcomed him. “Make yourself at home.” Fox started for the stairs to head back to his room.

“Thanks Anna, but I can’t stay long, I'm just here because…” Wolf’s voice trailed off.

“Wolf?” Anna said.

“You might want to sit down Anna.” Wolf said. Fox froze halfway up the stairs. Wolf officially had his full attention. Anna sat back down and Wolf shuffled uneasily on his feet.

“Oh man, how do I even say this?” Wolf mumbled.

“Say what, Wolf?” Anna asked.

“We lost James on our last mission.” Wolf finally said. Fox felt like he had been punched in the chest.

“How… What happened?” Anna managed.

“We don’t know details, but we know that Pigma turned traitor.” Wolf said. Instantly the shock drained from Fox and was replaced with rage.

“What!” Fox shouted. Anna jumped and spun around but Fox’s outburst didn’t seem to surprise Wolf.

Im workin right now so there will probably be more before the days over but i wanted to go ahead and put this up.

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Looks good.

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Heres another little bit.

“What!” Fox shouted. Anna jumped and spun around but Fox’s outburst didn’t seem to surprise Wolf. “You mean to tell me that Pigma shot my dad down?! You really expect me to believe that bull”

“Fox!” Wolf cut him off, “I never said Pigma shot him down.” Fox was breathing hard, his nails digging into the banister. “Personally,” Wolf continued, “I don’t think he’s dead. I doubled back after I was sure Peppy was safe and looked around. I couldn’t find any sign of him. Unfortunately, until we can prove he’s not dead, the official statement will be that he is.”

“Why?” Anna asked.

“Mainly because if where he went missing, we have no recon around Venom and we can’t get a search party in there. They make too much noise and would only be endangering themselves, and since we can’t get solid information, we have to assume the worst… That being said, I know James and there’s no way Pigma did him in.” Fox shuddered and relaxed a bit. “I gotta run.” Wolf said. “Fox, come here for a sec.” Fox followed Wolf outside. He pulled the door shut as Wolf pulled out a cigarette.

“You smoke?” Fox asked.

“Used to,” Wolf replied lighting up and taking a breath. He sighed hard and said, “I quit when I joined the force. You can’t smoke on carriers and in fighters. The air is too rich so you’ll just end up blowing up.”

“You quit but you still carry a pack around?”

“I always kept a good stock. It would have been a shame to just throw them all out.”

“Yea, I’m sure.” Fox said. Wolf laughed.

“You gotta take care of your mom.”Wolf said.

“Yea, I know, but…”


“I can’t just sit on my hands here.”

“Fox,” Wolf sighed, “I’m not askin’ you to sit and do nothing, but you got to make your mom’s ok first”

“You didn’t report in did you?”


“For this mission, you haven’t reported in have you?”

“Nope, not yet,” Wolf said and drew hard on the cigarette.

“Has Peppy?”


“You’re gonna end up catching crap.”

“That’s the plan.” Wolf dropped the cigarette but on the ground, stomped it out and swept the ashes of the cement.

“What are you talkin’ about?”

“I’m hoping the media will find me a better story than the poor widow of the best pilot this galaxy’s ever seen.”

“So you’re doing this for mom?”

“Yeah, and for James. He wouldn’t want her getting all this attention for stuff like this.”

“Yeah… this will be hard enough for her…”

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From now on, If I don't reply, that means that I think it's good. If I do, that will be because I'll  have a question/comment/just-wanna-say-it's-freakin'-awesome.  :wink: anyway, since I'm replying right now, might as well say it's good.  :)

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Well its not much, but this is all i have for now. I thought id have more time now but the oppisite turned out to be true.

“Yeah… this will be hard enough for her… You really think he’s still out there?”

“Yeah, yeah I do.”

“Good enough for me. You should get outta before you get in any more trouble.” Fox pulled himself out of his memories.

“It just really pissed me off that someone who broke protocol show up at my house in the middle of the night to break us the news and take the rap for mom’s sake turned around and ran off with Andross.”

“You shoulda seen him when he first found out.” Falco said. “Got so mad he punched the crap outta the nearest wall; broke all four knuckles in his right hand.”

“Sounds just like James.” Wolf said. Fox finished his coffee and put the mug in the sink.

“I’m headed for the bridge. I got some work to catch up on.” Fox left the mess hall and headed for the bridge. “Alright Rob here’s what I need.” He said, settling in behind the main console. “I want you to pull all the records you have on our team formations, pull the ones we use the most and set up fight paths for the lead pilot. I want dad to have everything he needs to fly for me while I'm out.” Fox spent the next hour digging through the team’s formations. It felt go to lose himself in his work for a while. He didn’t even hear Krystal come in. She walked up behind him and wrapped her arms around his neck.

“Morning” she said. Fox stood up and hugged her back.

“Sleep well?” He asked.

“Yep, how’s your back?”

“Krystal I'm fine.”

“OK,” she said breaking their embrace. “What you working on?”

“Formation flight paths for dad, just until I get back on my feet,” He said. “I think I'm about done, you hungry?”

“Breakfast sounds nice.”

“God I missed you.” Fox said. He pulled her into his arms. He held her tight and she returned the gesture, before he knew it he was crying. Silent tears rolled down his cheeks and onto her shoulder. He held her for a while longer. “Sorry,” he muttered.

“For what,” She asked and started stroking the back of his head.

“For being pathetic,” Fox replied. Krystal took a step back, tears in her eyes as well.

“How are you being pathetic?” She asked.

I really wish i had more. So, any opions up to now? Everyone whos read it please tell me what you liked and didn't like up till now. I really love getting feed back, good or bad, as long as your not an jerkoff about it.

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Honestly, I really like the idea behind the story. Except, my little two cents is this: Too much normal talking.

I see the description, and I do like it, but I would also like seeing it get a bit more deep than that in some cases. It is hard to explain, but I know you must have at least the idea of what I am trying to say. ^^;;

Do continue though. I like the story, and want to see it through. =]

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*shrug* I guess it's fine.

But the thing I find funny is that Fox had seen Krystal JUST YESTERDAY and now he misses her and is crying.....?

Sounds like a cheese scene is starting....I

don't really mind it except when it get's like this.

I mean, it's not like I hate it now or anything but it kinda sounds.....Strange....

Then again, maybe not. They WHERE always a cheesy couple.

Well, like I said, It's fine to me. And it's always nice to see more.

I was actually starting to think you were gonna ditch this seeing as how it's been quite a while, but I'm

glad you didn't.

I understand yer busy man. I just don't want you ditchin' this....I really like it.

So yeah....Then again, I guess there really isn't anything wrong with it.

I really don't care anymore. Keep it up! :yes:

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well the thing is you got to relize that making krystal leave was like a last straw for fox. He had to do it but that didn't mean it didnt tear him to pieces. but the thing is your body cant function like that so you have to bury it and move on and after a while you just get numb. And it hard to get past that, trust me i know. so its not that he's missed her since yesterday, it just that finally all the pain and heartace hes pushed down over the past year is finally starting to go away, and its finally  dawning on him that he really is going to get a sacond chance. I know they kissed the day before but deep down he was still hesitant, there were too many unknowns but now he can see past that. Plus, fox insn't really an emotional person but all that plus finding his dad is hitting home all at once. Hes finally got his life back. I'd cry too.

i'm getting around to all this in the story but i figured i'd go ahead and say it. it so easy to come up with ideas but so hard to make them fit together in a way that makes since, so yea.  :lol:

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Oooooh I get it now.

Yea, it's hard. But trust me, you are waaaaaay better then me.

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I hoped to have more but, i'm tired and have a killer head ace so here ya go

“How are you being pathetic?” She asked.

“I really thought I was past this.” He said. He kept trying to dry his eyes put it was pointless, he couldn’t stop the tears. “It almost killed me to make you leave. It was days before I was even a shell of myself. Then I just tried to push it all down. It took a while but I got to the point where I could function but I just got so numb. And then out of nowhere were back together and… and I was just so afraid I was going to lose you again.”


“I guess it finally setting in.” The tears were still coming although there was no sobbing. Fox hung his head and watched the tears fall. Krystal walked up to him, lifted his chin and kissed him. Just like that the entire world fell away. Fox stepped closer to her and placed his hand on the back of her head and the small of her back. The kissing ended quite a while later, then Krystal buried her head in Fox’s shoulder and it was his turn to stroke her hair. Suddenly the comm. relay pinged telling Fox that they were being hailed.

“Rob, is that the station?”

“Affirmative,” Rob responded.

“Let Falco know, give him time to get here and me and Krystal time to clean up.” Fox stepped back from Krystal and did his best to dry his eyes on his sleeves. It took a few minutes but they both managed to clean up, and just in time for Falco to come bursting into the bridge.

“Rob, put them through!” Falco shouted. There was a moment of silence then Beltino appeared on the screen.

“Thank goodness it’s you!” He said, adjusting his glasses. “I was afraid we had been found out.”

“No it’s just us,” Fox said.

“Is Katt there?” Falco asked.

“Why yes,” Beltino said, “I’ll go get her right away.” He walked off the screen and Falco seemed to panic. He started pacing and wringing his hands. Fox walked up to and put his hands on his shoulders.

“Dude, chill,” Fox said. Falco tried to speak but Fox cut him off. “Chill,” he repeated.

“I’m back,” Beltino announced.

oh, and nick, i see what your saying but the line between deep and cheezy is very fine. i guess i was afraid of takingit to far at the risk of being boring with the backstorys and corny with the fox and krystal stuff but theres no point in doing somthing if you don't do it right. thanks for the feedback. you too WF

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Chapter 6 is finally done.

“Where’s Katt?”

“I'm right here.” Katt responded. She stood with her arms crossed which was normal enough but her voice had a cruel bite in it Fox had never heard from her before, and Fox had seen her plenty mad. This could get ugly. What do you want?” She snapped.

“Good to see you to,” Falco said, seemingly undeterred.

“You must me stupid if you thing I'm going to forgive you!”

“Katt, that was three years ago!”

“What difference does that make?”

“Things have changed Katt, I’ve changed.”

“People don’t change Falco!” There was silence on the bridge for a moment. Then Falco turned away from the screen.

“You changed.” He said, just loud enough to hear. “You used to care.”

“Falco,” Kat said. The bite in her voice was gone, but Falco either didn’t hear her or didn’t care and he left the bridge without another word.

“I’ll go talk to him.” Fox said and started to leave the bridge. Krystal tore into Katt.

“What is wrong with you? How could you do that to him? He’s been pacing ruts in the floors over you and you just tear him” and that’s all Fox heard before the bridge door shut behind him. Falco hadn’t made it far. He was sitting around the corner with his head in his hands. Fox sat across from him.”

“She’s really letting her have it.” Fox said. Falco leaned back on the wall.

“I almost feel bad for Katt.” Falco said.

“Almost,” Fox said.

“She didn’t even give me a chance.” Falco stood up and walked off. Fox silently followed him. He knew it was better just to let this play out, let Falco get it off his chest. He followed him to his room. Fox leaned in his doorway as Falco paced his room.

“All through the academy she as the only one who would talk to me, the only one who didn’t think my parents screw up had doomed the whole system. And I was the only one who was there for her. When her mom and dad were drunk and tearing up the house I was the one who would go and get her. That’s where I was that night Wolf broke the news.”

“I knew you were with her but I didn’t know why.”

“Yea… she’s the only person I've ever been that close to. After all that, after everything we’ve been through, I lost my head once and suddenly none of that matters anymore?!”

What happened?” Fox asked. Falco stopped pacing.

“…I hit her…”


“It was during my stint as a merc before I came back to the team. I lost a guy under my command. Some kamikaze drone took him out. I've never lost someone on duty. I know I shoulda been able to deal with it, but I wasn’t. I ended up drunk and when she tried to drag me out I backhanded her. Next morning I woke up on the curb and she was gone. I haven’t seen her since.”

“I had no idea…”

“Fox,” It was Krystal, “I need to talk to you.”

“Hang on a sec Falco.” Fox left Falco and shut the door behind him.

“He hit her.” Krystal said.

“I know,” Fox said.

“And you’re ok with that?”

“I didn’t say that.”


“He was drunk.”

“And that makes it ok?”

“Why are you mad at me?”

“I'm not mad at you!”

“Coulda fooled me!” Suddenly Fox’s back caught and he doubled over and tried not to scream but failed.

“Fox! Are you ok?!” Krystal was kneeling in front of him.

“I’ll live,” he managed. It didn’t take long for the pain to subside. After Fox caught his breath he said “He lost a man.”


“Falco, he lost a man on a merc job. That’s why he was drunk. It still doesn't make it ok, but at least it makes since.” Krystal was quiet for a moment.

“… They need to talk.” She finally said. Suddenly the emergency siren blared. Falco flew out of his room and took off to the bridge with Fox and Krystal behind him.

“What’s going on” Falco shouted. Katt appeared on the screen.

“Were being boarded, they’ve found us.” She screamed.

“I'm coming for you!” Falco shouted and took off for the hanger.

Coming soon... ah who am i kidding,

Coming Eventualy (Hopefully like saturday) Chapter 7 Falco and Katt

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Heres a little bit of Chapter 7

Chapter 7: Falco and Katt

When Falco reached the hanger he found his ship waiting for him.

“Thanks Fox.” He thought aloud and headed for his weapons locker. He pulled out an oxygen helmet, a few concussion grenades (no need to blow any more holes in the station) and a custom pistol. Just because he hated ground missions didn’t mean he wasn’t ready. He grabbed six extra fifteen round clips and hurried to his ship. He put his helmet on as he jumped into his ship. He started to pull up the diagnostic when Fox came over TEAMCOMM.

“Your ship’s fine! Just go! The team’s on its way!” As Fox spoke, the lift lock released and Falco shot from the hanger. Fox came over the comm. again. “Rob’s scanned the station. There’s a crew access hatch here.” A holographic display popped up and showed the station. The station spun until the underside faced Falco, then a small patch lit up and the display zoomed in. Falco heard Krystal in the background mumble about feeling useless.

“There’s no way I can land in a service hatch.” Falco said. “Looks like I'm going for a little walk. I’ll set the autopilot to take it back to the Great Fox. Krystal, think you can handle her?”

“You trust me with your ship?” she asked.

“Of course. Besides, were down enough pilots.”

“I’ll take good care of it.”

“Alright, looks like were set.” Fox said. “Dad has his HUD so he’s officially the squad leader, all you gotta do is not miss.”

“This outta be fun.” Falco said.

Arnt you all so proud of me? Iaccutly got a good bit done today  :D

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I am proud! ^^ Lol.

I haven't read this new stuff yet, but I promise I will later tonight and respond to it properly then. ^^

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