First time trying a barrel roll I mean fanic hope it's alrite.

[ICantLose74]

Okay I juat got started on a fanfic for the first time and I was wondering if I could get feedback and comments any way here it is. I'd like to add this (you'll notice in my words fromthe author its there anyway) is my first time so please don't criticize me as much I'm still new at this. 

Words from the author: Hello I’d like to say a few words before I get horribly flamed for my creation *laughs* right now I’m going to lay a few things right here right now: 1.THIS IS PURELY IDEA/FANBASED 2.This is my first time seriously writing a fanfiction so I’m a lil nervous, and I’m hoping you won’t judge the heck outta me or my writing since it’s my first time. 3. This novel may contain violence and/or language so this is a fair warning (it’s really depending on my novel writing mood) 4. We all make mistakes when writing no one is perfect. 5. I’m kinda  gonna be makin this up as I go along hopefully it’ll work (I feel like I should say a lot more but none the less, lets move on to the story)

The Fox of the Caribbean

A story by: ICantLose74

As the “Lylatt’s Revenge” roamed down space looking for it’s next vessel to plunder Fox wondered why he considered pirating in the first place and if it were time for him to retire, he’d done a good run in his eyes and really thought of just settling down. As he pondered quitting pirating for a sec his thought was interrupted by a sudden rumbling on the ship, the warning lights going off & R.O.B’s voice said over the loudspeakers: Sector 4’s hull has been breached turbine thrusters failing. Shit Fox thought as he ran up the stairs to the main deck, who could it be attacking this time? Could it be Pepper he hasn’t tried a capture on us since that last daring run on Meteo. As Fox reached the top flight of the stair he ran into Peppy who looked at him and said: What’s the big idea Fox? Here I was happily sleepin dreamin of a carrot field and suddenly boom there’s another attack. Yeah I know what you mean, it’s a real pisser if ya ask me. came another voice, Fox looked over to see it was Falco by him. As the three ran up to the main bay Fox saw Slippy there who said: Uh Fox we got trouble, big trouble this time. Lemme guess Pepper? was Fox’s reply.  Slippy: No it’s worse this time. Worse than Pepper Fox thought this must be serious, than who is it Fox asked. Before Slippy could reply R.O.B interrupted saying incoming transmission. Bring up the monitor! Fox commanded. R.O.B dialed a few buttons in and a screen came up, static was on for a second when suddenly from the speakers of the screen a voice was heard saying: “Can’t let you plunder those ships StarFox!” Fox: Oh no I recognize that voice it can’t be! Suddenly upon the moniter Wolf appeared saying; Well, well Fox how long has it been two…three years tops? What do you want?  Fox snarled in reply. Wolf: It not what I want it’s what Andross wants. Fox: What do you mean. A voice came and as did a face that looked like an ape on the screen to Fox it seemed a little whiny: What you didn’t know my uncle’s the new emperor around these parts, he’s hasn’t forgiven you for that bomb run you made on Venom. Well Andrew are you playing errand boy for Andross now? said Slippy A smirk and giggle came from around the corner of the ship. Wolf: Huh? Whos there show yourself coward! As Wolf said this a blue fox came into view Fox looked at her for a sec and shaked his head: he knew her face all too well that was Krystal the groups new trainee and local hottie around the ship. “Ah Krystal nice of you to join us finally”. Peppy said slightly sarcastic. Falco: Settle down gramps you knew she’d come eventually, anyway Wolf what do want from us besides another thrashing. Wolf replied with: I came to give you a warning or at least that’s what Andross has told me to give you. Andross say’s: That this time theres no escape for he’s joined forces with Pepper and knows that even you won’t be able to outrun them both, he say’s this to you Fox: You will die this time just like your Father did when he was excuted at Venom.  Fox shuddered for second at the memory of his father, when he felt a hand on hs shoulder Fox looked to see it was Peppys. Peppy quietly said: Fox it’s okay and responded to Wolf saying: You just let Andross know this time were ready for anything he throws at us! Wolf: Very well I can do that I’ll see you all eventually. He looked at Fox and said: Until we meet Fox, don’t let anyone take you down! With that the screen went black and to static. A noise was heard outside the ship and Slippy said as he looked out the window: Look they’re retreating! No. Fox said theyre not retreating this was just a warning and the beginning.

[ICantLose74]

If anyone has been anticipating this story I'm sorry for the delays I've been extremely busy and also I'v been having major writers block lately, if anyone wishes to give ideas here feel free to I may just use them and give thanks to the person who gave an idea.