Gamecuber459 Posted June 28, 2005 Share Posted June 28, 2005 Hey Guys. I'm finally ready to start sharing some of my work. I'm really hoping to show some artwork around here, but as I've posted around the sight sometimes, "My Scanner is worth Crap". That doesn't mean I can't share some of my poetry with you guys. Hope you like it. Unable to Breath I walk down the street, as dusk starts to fall The alley is dark, no light at all. The bricks of the building side wall are all scarred With words that amend to those broken and mared. I walk with confusion of what I suspect Alone on this pavement, I walk quite direct. I don't know who's watching or who spots a glare upon my own figure their eyes, they stare. They watch for amusement, they watch for a show What they are planning, I'll never know. I turn 'round the corner and spot in the air A small set of eyes that look, but don't care. I follow them fast, without no second thought I don't know who's there, or what they have sought. They stop in the alley and glare back at me My soul has been frozen, I'm scared of what I see. The eyes, they then vanish, while I start to cough. I kneel to the ground, as I struggle alot. I don't understand, and I don't question why I'm dying right there, but I don't cry I'm stuck in myself, like a sword in its sheath I fall to the ground, unable to breath. The eyes reappear, and I stare at the one Who's hidden in darkness, his actions begun. My breath has turned cold, and my body turned limb. Unable to breath, I have died yet again. I'll return to this world, that holds my soul's sheath. As I travel the land, unable to breath. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XG Fox Posted June 28, 2005 Share Posted June 28, 2005 :lol: Better than me, obviously. That's good! :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gamecuber459 Posted June 28, 2005 Author Share Posted June 28, 2005 Thanks Trapped I'm like a turtle that hides in his shell Afraid of this world of which you tell. To others, the sky is bright and clear But all I see is dark and gleer. This world is hard, this world is cold But I won't die when I grow old. This world holds my soul embraced. Trapped I am, tears on my face. I can't escape, I never try. It holds me back before I die. I try to fight, but never win I'm trapped inside, the pain begins Like stabbing wounds, or piercing flesh The blood will drip upon my chest. The pain I hold, I hide away To warn the world to stay away. When all is left and all is gone The world will end, when it's begun. The torment, pain, and blood I see I'm trapped inside, and never free. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XG Fox Posted June 28, 2005 Share Posted June 28, 2005 Dang, you should write a book! These are gold! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
james mccloud Posted June 28, 2005 Share Posted June 28, 2005 I agree. these are GRRRRRRRRREAT!!! :lol: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gamecuber459 Posted June 28, 2005 Author Share Posted June 28, 2005 I'm really good at dark poetry. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XG Fox Posted June 28, 2005 Share Posted June 28, 2005 Seems so. I'm not good at poetry, but if it sounds good, then it probably is! :lol: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gamecuber459 Posted June 28, 2005 Author Share Posted June 28, 2005 Here's another one Blood Flowing throught my heart and veins The blood of wolves will always reign. The demon that I hold within Escapes at night and soon begins The creature embraces my soul tight As it journeys through the night. The beast within, I can't abide I've held this creature deep inside. If I die, the beast will reign A never ending battle to gain Control of my body, control of my mind This type of battle is one of a kind. The demon, beast or what ever you call The creature that controls it all The mind, the body, the soul are used To do the deeds, that will soon be choosed You try to fight, but never win The blood controls and burns my skin I face the night as the beast I am. I'll hold it inside for as long as I can. The beast I've become, the beast I will be The creature has escaped and gone free. It roams the land, with the blood within Of the man who freed him, now let it begin. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Krystal's_Lover Posted June 28, 2005 Share Posted June 28, 2005 Wow, very nice poetry. I really like it. We should talk poetry sometime. You should check out my thread, too. I'd like to get your opinion on it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gamecuber459 Posted June 28, 2005 Author Share Posted June 28, 2005 The Darkness just keeps coming. Hell Bloody corpse and dying souls Demon flesh and rotting bones. Fire burns and water steams killing, death, and high pitch screams. Blood and Darkness cover them Those with hearts that filled with sin. Soaked in blood and drowned in tears. Bring upon your darkest fears. Demons, ghouls, and ghost are born. When a humans life is torn Hell is burning, Hell is bright Killing all, with it's burning light. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Krystal's_Lover Posted June 28, 2005 Share Posted June 28, 2005 I might like it more if...well, check your PMs, you'll see what I mean. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gamecuber459 Posted June 28, 2005 Author Share Posted June 28, 2005 I'm sorry about that. check your PM please. I'm really sorry. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EvolutionSFox Posted June 28, 2005 Share Posted June 28, 2005 Uhh... goodjob Gamecuber, that's pretty good mate. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gamecuber459 Posted June 28, 2005 Author Share Posted June 28, 2005 Only the first three. are good. The last one is actually Krystal Lover's. I have a low percentage of ADD and accidentally created a poem that references from hers. I'm sorry KL. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Krystal's_Lover Posted June 28, 2005 Share Posted June 28, 2005 'Tis alright. Just remember what I wrote back to you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gamecuber459 Posted June 29, 2005 Author Share Posted June 29, 2005 I will. I'll always check my work from now on before posting it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XG Fox Posted June 29, 2005 Share Posted June 29, 2005 Only the first three. are good. The last one is actually Krystal Lover's. I have a low percentage of ADD and accidentally created a poem that references from hers. I'm sorry KL. It's still really good! To me they both sound completely different, but yes, there are a few parts that remind you of the other, but nothing really obvious. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gamecuber459 Posted June 29, 2005 Author Share Posted June 29, 2005 It was still wrong of me though. I didn't know what I was doing. I do stuff like that all the time, but not on purpose. I'm still really sorry KL. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XG Fox Posted June 29, 2005 Share Posted June 29, 2005 Hey, it's occasional for me too, probably for a lot of people. It was just little, don't get too uptight about it. Remember, there are much bigger things in life to worry about. I still want to read both yours and KL's works, they're good! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gamecuber459 Posted June 29, 2005 Author Share Posted June 29, 2005 You know XG Fox, your right. Ignore my edit I did up above. I'm still sorry for what I did, but it was just an accident. Thanks XG Fox. I'll even Edit that message and change to poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XG Fox Posted June 29, 2005 Share Posted June 29, 2005 You're welcome. You know, I had a thought for a poem while at work today... you guys might get me started that'd be the day... but then I forgot it... :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gamecuber459 Posted June 29, 2005 Author Share Posted June 29, 2005 There, I changed the poem, edited a message or two and everything is alright.....I hope. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XG Fox Posted June 29, 2005 Share Posted June 29, 2005 Just remember what I said, and you should be fine. *pats Gamecuber's back* It's okay buddy. Just a simple misunderstanding. Actually, you did. You got me started. Now I'm working on one right now... I'm not much of a poet, but we'll see how it goes... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gamecuber459 Posted June 29, 2005 Author Share Posted June 29, 2005 Thanks XG Fox. I owe you one. You like some kind of Philosopher or something. 8) interesting. IF you don't want to post your own topic, feel free to post any poem here XG Fox. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XG Fox Posted June 29, 2005 Share Posted June 29, 2005 Philosopher? Nah. Just think of me of someone that has common sense. That's really all it is. It MIGHT be done tonight... doubt it, but then I could post it tomorrow afternoon... I'll post it on my own, you can have your space, as you have respected mine. :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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