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Four-eyed Vulpine

The song I'll be using is "Through Heaven's Eyes", and the way it'll work is that Marcus will be sitting in his bunk feeling worthless due to his friend's comments, and then he hears this music playing in his mind, and then the voice of Fox begins singing the lyrics.

Fox singing??  That'll be new and interesting.  I hope he sings well.  :D

P.S.  I actually made a thread with 100 replies??  Hot dang.  :D

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starfox87

Thank you. I should have the second chapter up soon.

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PuffNStuff

I once read a fic where focs (lol) sings a micheal jackson song. I just skipped it...... Focs shouldnt sing.... ever IMO! I won't flame you if you if he does sing in your fanfic

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foxbird22

I read that story as well.  I think it was "Fox and Krystal's Night Out", wasn't it?  I dun remember.

Michael Jackson = death

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starfox87

Sorry for the delay in my next chapter. My family just started getting ready for Thanksgiving, so I haven't had a chance to write.

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Guest Chiro-Chan

I did a short story once based on the song 'Alice's Restaraunt' for English once. xD Wasn't Star Fox related, but it was pretty funny. I wish I still had that... ><

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Gene Inari

I've always toyed with the idea of a Corneria-Katina conflict of some sort yet never really done anything with it. If I were to do it, I would probably use all original characters while game characters get cameos and the like. Emphasizing on the opinions of soldiers on both sides of the conflict. 

Basically the conflict starts with a fleet of ships from Corneria to Katina, filled with troops, supplies, ect. But then one of the ship inexplicably explodes and takes out most (if not all) of the fleet with it. After a unusually brief investigation done by Corneria. It was officially called a "dramatic engine failure" (I'm still working on exact and correct details) and Katina almost immediately blames Corneria, saying there was a bomb planted to keep Corneria the dominant military power. After tensions rise Katina attacks a Cornerian base on (I haven't decided where, but probably Aquas or Macbeth) and then it escalates to a full on war, with other planets getting dragged into the fight. And it gets kinda self-explanatory after that.

Although what I'm gonna keep hidden is the fact it was sabotage, but not by Corneria, but Venom. To get revenge on the Lylat System for defeating them in the last war. Venom actually has people working in both governments and is convincing both sides that the other is "evil" basically and widening the rift between them.

So far this is just an idea in my head.

While I haven't had the chance to actually type anything, I have been keeping this fresh in my mind. I will probably start the story with a large-scale labor strike on Macbeth. Corneria sends over troops to keep stikers under control and Titania sends over strike-breakers to keep everything moving.

Fast forward to when everything is settled. The ships that had the Titanian strike-breakers leaves Macbeth while the soldiers from Corneria stay nd make sure everything is back to normal. The ships get to Corneria and it just so happens that the Gate is down to matinence and they'll have to go through the asteroid field with just a few figher escorts.

However somewhere along the line one of the ships explode and the escorts are mysteriously missing. Other chain reactions start and they're totally destroyed.

That'll be the intro chapter and I think I settled on a title: Alligence Unknown

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Guest Black_Zawisza

Hi again, for those of you who remember me. I posted on this thread a while back, saying I would provide an outline for my first fanfic. I put it off for a while, but I've come up with a plot outline for the first three chapters. Anyone interested?

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Mr. Krystal

Hi again, for those of you who remember me. I posted on this thread a while back, saying I would provide an outline for my first fanfic. I put it off for a while, but I've come up with a plot outline for the first three chapters. Anyone interested?

If you're looking for advice on your plots, sure, post away!

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Guest Black_Zawisza

Thanks for showing interest! Here it is: Star Fox: Defection, Summary of Prologue and Chapters 1-2...

Prologue:

The story starts with General Peppy in his office, when he receives orders from an unknown superior that he must send all available ships to the coordinates of the Great Fox (a new, awesomer one was built after the sucky Assault version blew up) on attack vector. Peppy contacts this superior, demanding an explantation. After a brief argument, a grenade is tossed into the office. It explodes, severely injuring Peppy. He has just enough time to send a message to Star Fox.

Chapter One:

Meanwhile, at the Great Fox was just returning from several successive missions throughout the Lylat System and had decided to spend shore leave on Zoness. All of a sudden, Zoness is attacked by Cornerian forces. They give Star Fox an ultimatum; surrender to the might of the Cornerian Fleet, or have the entire planet destroyed. Star Fox fights back, though unsuccessfully. When all hope is lost, Fox receives a message from an unidentified vessal, commanded by Wolf. Wolf invites Fox to join him in taking out the remnants of the Cornerian Fleet. Reluctantly, Fox agrees. Venomian Invader IIIs begin flooding the sky. After an extensive battle sequence, Fox and Wolf emerge triumphant.

Chapter Two:

After the battle, Fox boards the VAS Wolf (Venomian Alliance Ship. And yes, I know Wolf is a horrible name, but that's all I can come up with. Any ideas?), where he is unexpectedly captured. Star Wolf explains the current situation: in Star Fox's absence, multiple public servants were simultaniously asainated. Due to several pieces of evidence (which I will explain in the chapter), it is obvious that the Lylat government has turned totalitarianist. Team Star Fox are tossed into cells, and they attempt to escape. They make their way to the bridge, where Wolf is waiting for them. After a brigade of apes enter the room, Wolf orders them to put their blasters down. This time, he shows Fox a recording of Peppy's conversation with the villain. He gives Fox the same ultimatum as before; Fox accepts this time. Wolf then invites team Star Fox to stay aboard his ship for the night.

More chapter summaries coming soon! Please critique the fic so far!

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Guest Chiro-Chan

I'm working on a story somewhere else (may post it here eventually), but I haven't had the time to work on it, though I may finish up the 5th chapter tonight and start chapter 6. So far, this is sort of a redux on Assault minus the Aparoids (yes, Andross is back), and it's the 64 team again. (Krystal is out searching for answers about what happened to Cerinia and stuff.) I need more stuff to happen on Corneria first though. I'm considering having some Venomese soldiers attack a city somewhere (thus forcing Fox and the others to fight on foot), but I dunno exactly what to do.

Oh, and the 'VAS Hailer' sounds cool. xD

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Vindr

So, yeah, I'm a writer, but I have a serious problem

I'm writing somewhat of a fiction, and whenever I use an outline, I can't really stick to it, so a quick question.

Is it acceptable to NOT use an outline? Suicide I'm guessing...

anyway, thanks.

EDIT: to Chiro, maybe small uprisings on Corneria of venomeese solders?

And I might post some of the summaries to the fiction(s) here later...

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evilwaffles

So, yeah, I'm a writer, but I have a serious problem

I'm writing somewhat of a fiction, and whenever I use an outline, I can't really stick to it, so a quick question.

Is it acceptable to NOT use an outline?  Suicide I'm guessing...

anyway, thanks.

And I might post some of the summaries to the fiction(s) here later...

It really depends on the writer, I thought of the beginning, the twist and what I would like to happen at the end. But I never think of specifics of what will happen in a chapter, so, yeah, it depends on the writer. Some can follow a whole outline, some use an outline lightly some don't use it at all.

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Kursed

If you have any ideas or just want to brainstorm on plots, feel free to discuss them here.  Perhaps some writer out there will get some needed inspiration from this.

Note:  This is just for short ideas, so don't go posting your whole fan fic here.

I need some opinions on my next chapter for my fan-fic Krystal and some other Lylat system girls as well as Marcus have ran from the Lylat system and ended up in Ours i was thinking that they may stop some pirates trying to get out of the system.

I can usually get one page of a story without Anything  just from my mind If it's a good idea then i take a  brainstorm break I donno if that's a disavantage or not since I never write any idea's down untill the rough draft or final copy in the case of my latest Fan-fics.

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Zwolf

I'm writing somewhat of a fiction, and whenever I use an outline, I can't really stick to it, so a quick question.

Is it acceptable to NOT use an outline?  Suicide I'm guessing...

How in-dept have you thought about the story before you started writing? (If you started writing it, I mean)

I need some opinions on my next chapter for my fan-fic Krystal and some other Lylat system girls as well as Marcus have ran from the Lylat system and ended up in Ours i was thinking that they may stop some pirates trying to get out of the system.

Opinions of what? That summary just gave us?

This has no malicious intent at all, but, I've noticed that you started a lot of Fan-fics and didn't finish them; just wrote a couple chapters and then gave up, (correct me if I'm wrong). I think it would help if you just stuck to one, and really thought it through. I didn't start writing "Mirrors" until I had the basically the whole story in my head. Now, the only aggravating part is the little side conversations and the connections to each major event.

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Kursed

How in-dept have you thought about the story before you started writing? (If you started writing it, I mean)

Opinions of what? That summary just gave us?

This has no malicious intent at all, but, I've noticed that you started a lot of Fan-fics and didn't finish them; just wrote a couple chapters and then gave up, (correct me if I'm wrong). I think it would help if you just stuck to one, and really thought it through. I didn't start writing "Mirrors" until I had the basically the whole story in my head. Now, the only aggravating part is the little side conversations and the connections to each major event.

I'm a Improving writer my works are going to start small I've only done 2 Fan-fics that are a page or larger  I'm currently working on a third. The Tigress Bio was simply a school project. and others were just some bordem filllers.

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Zwolf

All right. I just thought it would be easier to get your ideas straight if you only had one to focus on. The fun part is weaving a story around all the breaks in the game.

Say, make a story about pre-SF 64, then another pre-Adventures, then another pre-Assault, etc... And tie 'em all together.

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Kursed

All right. I just thought it would be easier to get your ideas straight if you only had one to focus on. The fun part is weaving a story around all the breaks in the game.

Say, make a story about pre-SF 64, then another pre-Adventures, then another pre-Assault, etc... And tie 'em all together.

I'm focusing on one I just havn't touched it in awhile.. and it's kinda pre command or assault.

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Vindr

How in-dept have you thought about the story before you started writing? (If you started writing it, I mean)

I haven't started writing it out yet, what happens is that I just jot down random ideas, make graphs of the main plot and story in a notebook, then go from there. Here's what I have so far.

The story itself uses that old legend "The Sword of Damocles."

It's got a lot in it: two rival companies, Cornerian Armament Technologies, which funds Arwing Aeronautics, is failing and quickly being replaced by another company called Comtek, who is the "jack of all trades" company, where they make everything from cars to home appliances, including weapons. At the same time, the general election for the Cornerian Chief Minister (Their legislative head) is taking place in Corneria. Fox of course, is called in to investigate Comtek after they applied for a biological medicine permit. Soon, he discoveres a plot to kill both canidates, as well as the current Chief Minister, and then Lylat plunges into a Civil war when he fails to stop it. The plan, of course, is named "The Sword of Damocles."

They get the biological permit to create little bugs, I call "Worms."  Kinda like headcrabs, they eat your head, then you turn into a zombie, but this isn't the main attraction of course.

That's what I have jotted down in my notes, but I just write it out as I go along.

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Zwolf

Good! Don't start writing yet. :roll: Try this...

Start with your ending. I mean that literally. Map out how you want the ending to be, then work backwards.

The advantage of this, is your story will stay on track with the main idea (which ties to the conclusion of the climax, with is your ending  :wink:).

The connections between major events are pretty important. You have to keep the reader in a general direction with rising actions (stuff that leads to the climax).

Every so often, throw in a random "update" or something, keep it vague and mysterious. It makes the readers question it and want to keep reading.

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Vindr

Thanks, I'll try that when I start it this weekend!

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Black-Cat

im in progress and i thought mine was weird :?

in mine fox's arwing(spelling?) got sabotaged and got sent to the hospital in a comma and now its 4 months later hes been replaced in a meld of star fox and wolf and fox is stuck as a civilian trying to find out who tried to kill him and get back to his team

(spoiler!)

in this story i finally am going to kill falco mwahahahahaha!!!!!! :P   

Wait, wait, wait, wait. What?

The Arwing gets into a coma (not comma, we're not parting sentences here) and where did Wolf come from and how did they become civilians?

Where did Falco come from?

I'm confused.

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lost_in_thought

ya more or less that was an epic fail in grammatical skillz

ya that idea died i realized after trying to put it into words that story line was going nowhere

<Story idea2>

(3rd person)

our main focus is second lieutenant (insert first name suggestion here) Wolfe

after a tragic air demonstration collision he wakes up 4 months later in a hospital

who he once thought as the love of his life gave up on him after 2 months of no progress

now without a job love family (cross that emotional bridge when it arrives) or a place to stay

he must try to navigate through civilian life and back to where he belongs ... the air/space

multiple cameos planned

feel free to add or subtract   

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Black-Cat

ya more or less that was an epic fail in grammatical skillz

ya that idea died i realized after trying to put it into words that story line was going nowhere

<Story idea2>

(3rd person)

our main focus is second lieutenant (insert first name suggestion here) Wolfe

after a tragic air demonstration collision he wakes up 4 months later in a hospital

who he once thought as the love of his life gave up on him after 2 months of no progress

now without a job love family (cross that emotional bridge when it arrives) or a place to stay

he must try to navigate through civilian life and back to where he belongs ... the air/space

multiple cameos planned

feel free to add or subtract   

That could work as an original idea, you really don't have to depend on the StarFox universe for that one.

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lost_in_thought

ya that is more where this one is going

but im just going to do cameos and cross references to give the readers her something to better relate to until we get more accustomed to my characters and style

and the fact they are ready made characters not someone i have to completely design and more or less "build from the ground up"

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